laura claridge

yay update! well, i liked it. though it still kinda seems like its searching for a plot.. just my opinion. the brother sounds interesting, and mildly weird. Sara is awesome. ...

yay a OHSHC fanfic!! i liked your Kyoya, his way of thinking was in character. I think i saw a couple of typos, but nothing too major. Are you continuing ...

NEXT CHAPTER IS UP

lol that was actually really amusing. I don't think I could've seen that ending coming XD

Cheshire-Writer, thanks so much for the comment. It made my day. I just got my own copy of the book two hours ago ^___^ I'm thinking of a chaptered outsiders ...

POTAFan1973, thanks so much for the comment. I'm really glad that it was in character.

Though, I don't think he was the type to write a poem lol! Lol no, he's probably not... maybe he was drunk?? Though I do think he was dead at ...

Yeah, you could try using commas at the end of dialog. ah yup, i get you. I'll try my best for the next chapter :)

One thing though: I can't follow your dialogue too well. It's kind of confusing. thanks for your review. Any tips and/or ideas on how i could make the dialogue less ...

heyy what's happened here? why did you delete the story? It had plenty of potential if you took the time to sit down and hash it out. maybe find a ...

[/quote]Johnny cake! I finished the outsiders. You're right. It's the best book I've read in a long time.[quote] of course it is. And in tribute to it, Olli is obsessed ...

hey guys, thanks for the reviews. They're very much appreciated. thatannagirl, I went back and changed the things you mentioned. The scrapping thing, I was meant to say scraping. ^__^ ...

dude.. that actually made me really sad.. and angry

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i liked it. the form made it easy to read